Yes, that schedule still works for me.
I can join a little early if you want to walk through the outline before everyone else arrives.
The notes from last week were clear, and I think the second draft solves the spacing issue.
If you send the updated version this afternoon, I can review it tonight and reply in the morning.
Also, I agree that the shorter opening feels more natural and less repetitive for the group.
I can join a little early if you want to walk through the outline before everyone else arrives.
The notes from last week were clear, and I think the second draft solves the spacing issue.
If you send the updated version this afternoon, I can review it tonight and reply in the morning.
Also, I agree that the shorter opening feels more natural and less repetitive for the group.
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I looked over your draft and I think the main idea is in good shape.
You asked whether the opening should be shorter, and I would trim the first two lines so the purpose is clearer right away.
The list near the end is helpful, though I would switch the second and third points to improve the flow.
If you want, send the revised copy after lunch and I can check the wording before the meeting starts tomorrow afternoon.
You asked whether the opening should be shorter, and I would trim the first two lines so the purpose is clearer right away.
The list near the end is helpful, though I would switch the second and third points to improve the flow.
If you want, send the revised copy after lunch and I can check the wording before the meeting starts tomorrow afternoon.



